“You used me,” he said.
The fluorescent lights hummed as they flickered above her.
She didn’t know what to say. Yes, she used him. What made her think he would like it? Maybe it was because she wanted to be used herself.
She didn’t know what to say. Yes, she used him. What made her think he would like it? Maybe it was because she wanted to be used herself.
I like this. Insightful; a glimpse into the workings of the inner psyche. Very cool.
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DeleteNice work. I guess we all project a little. It's easier to think that everybody wants what we want then to admit what we want is different or taboo. (Your picture link is broken. At least for me.)
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DeleteIf by "picture link," you mean the page that the picture links to, it's just the site where I got the picture, which sells lighting. You're not missing much.
It never fails that we are so focused on our own needs that we don't see how we affect others. I liked this!
ReplyDeleteYes, it seems to go that way, or the polar opposite, where we're so worried about others we don't remember to be honest about our own needs. Thanks for reading!
DeleteI love how your sound actually evokes physical silence. People and communication...
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jennifer. Yes, that sound...it's like the office building version of crickets chirping.
Delete"fluorescent lights hummed as they flickered" - great detail layered with human interactions ...
ReplyDeleteThanks. I thought that sound would help to capture the awkwardness of the situation.
DeleteNicely done. Love the humming fluorescent lights. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Suzanne!
DeleteThe fluorescent lights hummed as they flickered above her.<--that is so descriptive. I can hear that noise, completely.
ReplyDeleteHumming, flickering fluorescent lights always creep me out. Perfect background for her observation.
ReplyDelete"The fluorescent lights hummed as they flickered above her." - Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteVery nicely done. The first line put me right there.
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DeleteThe sound of the lights built tension in your scene. I liked that you left it to us to decide what she said back to him. My guess: "Not any more than you used me."
ReplyDeleteHmm, that would be interesting.
DeleteThe fluorescent light is such a great metaphor for what is going on underneath everything here. Great job.
ReplyDeleteSuddenly everything is illuminated in a too-bright, unpleasant light? Thanks for your comment!
DeleteI liked this. Great insight into our justifications.
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